Rainbow of a Draft (5.1)

In this post we're gonna set the importance of having a voice in your own paper. We're gonna take a part of my rough draft that I think is least of my voice and highlight whose voice is whose. Facts, Someone else's idea, my ideas

         There are two main types of deafness (using a lower cased ”d” to describe the medical point of view): conductive and sensor neural. Conductive deafness is when a person’s hearing is the only thing affected and senor neural is when a person’s hearing is affected but also the neural pathway to their brain is also damaged so this makes it harder to retain information overall. In this paper, I’ll be talking about students with conductive deafness; those who are fully capable of retaining information but due to neglect from teachers have a harder time actually learning. 

For the legal means of this issue, it has supposedly already been taken care of. In 2004, the Individuals with Disabilities Education Act was passed. The purpose of this act was to provide a “free, appropriate public education to all children with disabilities in the least restrictive environment” and that the “government must fund these programs permanently” (IDEA). So the essence of this act is to say that it is illegal for a public school to turn away disabled kids, including the Deaf. As a result of this being passed, many realized that only 50% of American disabled children attending public schools weren’t getting support they needed to succeed and 1 million of them were rejected from an everyday public school classroom (Marschark,139-140). But as the No Child Left Behind act was passed, many Deaf students had been taken out of public schools and put into specialized Deaf schools. With them they brought their low test scores and as more and more of them came into the same school, the average test scores would be too low to function as a school and be shut down. As most of you are also probably thinking, Marschark writes “Unfortunately, those transfers often seem designed for the benefit of the public schools rather than the children, so deaf students who are lagging behind will not pull down school test scores.” (140). So when it comes down to it, legally there hasn't been much done, hence there should be more done in the classroom to benefit these Deaf students instead.

     A teacher’s job is to be sure that students understand and retain information being taught to them, with little to few questions left on the subject matter. Along with this, their job is also to have a professional relationship with students when helping them grasp concepts and being sure their environment is safe enough to learn in, such as keeping issues like bullying under control. This can be a challenge when you have a Deaf student, but in order to help them succeed and for teachers to achieve the goal of teaching there has to be ways to accommodate that student just as there are ways for others. With this type of thinking and dedication on the teacher’s part, the Deaf student should have a much easier and better time learning material and in the meantime show progressing test scores like any student would.  

I think there is a pretty equal balance of colors here but maybe there can be more mixing in with the facts and source ideas with my ideas. I think it is appropriate, I suppose it is just the way I organized it when writing my draft.